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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The
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 Earnings of one company in 2015-2016 are illustrated in the graph accompanied by a table showing a numerical comparison between the years 2015 and 2016.
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 a
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 it is crystal clear that there is only a subtle difference between the
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 company's
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value
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. The
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 rate is presented in 5
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 with Petroleum and Engineered products having the highest
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 of approximately 60 billion dollars these two
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also
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 experienced a 3 and 8.5 percentage of growth in 2016 compared to 2015. The third category represents Gems and Jewellery with a
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 of almost 40 billion which in fact is reported to experience a 5.15% downfall in 2016. Agricultural Products and Textiles are the 4th and 5th category analyzed in the graph with a
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 of almost 30 billion dollars it is important to note that both of these
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 experienced a rise in their
value
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 in 2016. All things considered, We can conclude that
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 company's
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 of
export
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 has experienced growth in
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the majority
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 of the
categories
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 presented.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, categories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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