The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.
The line graph illustrates eating of 3 variety types of fast food in Britain between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
, the number of
hamburger
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and fish and chips increased,
whereas
that of pizza decreased. There was the biggest difference in the
hamburger
consumption. In detail, the quantity of
hamburger
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and fish and chips stood at approximately 90 and 40 respectively in 1970. Both of them went up to 150 and 100 in turn in the following 10 years. There was a dramatic rise in the indicator of
hamburger
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, at 500,
while
that of fish and chips observed a slight increase before gradually rising
at the end
of the period. With regard to the number of
pizza
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, even though there was ranked first in the figure for pizza, at 300, at the beginning of the period,
then
it declined to almost 200 before going up and reaching 205
at the end
of the period.
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