The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.

The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.
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us information about the daily consumption of each
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person
in three categories
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within
a quarter starting from 1981. At first
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while
consumption of margarine and butter
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1981, low fat and reduced spreads
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1996. Butter moved up slightly between 1981 and 1986
while
margarine moved downward slowly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • daily
  • per person
  • 1981 to 2007
  • country
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • relatively
  • steadily
  • significant
  • consumed
  • gap
  • narrowed
  • overtake
  • popular choice
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