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The line graph below compares the number of British people commuting to work by car, bus or train everyday from 1970 to 2030.

The line graph below compares the number of British people commuting to work by car, bus or train everyday from 1970 to 2030.
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The provided line graph gives us information about the number of British people commuting to work by three vehicles within a half-century starting from 1970. At first glance,
while
trains
 and
cars
 went upward gradually, the number of
buses
 moved down slightly. Using a car and train to go to work increased steadily between 1970 and 2000 following 10 years
cars
 and
trains
 stabilised which was the first and
last
 constant for
cars
 and
buses
.
Then
, they climbed until 2030 and
trains
 reached the highest point just below 6,
cars
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and cars
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 touched their peak at 9 million each year.
Although
buses
 started
a
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at a
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higher level when compared to the amount of
trains
, the number of people who commute to work by bus reduced gradually from 1970 to 2030 and in 2030
buses
 saw their lowest point at just above 3.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trains, cars, buses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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