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Many people believe that formal 'pen and paper' examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. What is your view of examinations? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, most
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schools and teaching institutions use
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paper based
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 to qualify the learning capacity and intelligence of the
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,
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 method brings a
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 the efficacy and reliability of the examinations to assess
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' capabilities. I would like to start my argument by writing about the importance of the
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examinations
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. People who are in favour of
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 method believe that, after teaching each subject, pupils should be assessed to determine how effective was the course and how much
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 learn from the subject. They claim that
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 tests are the best way because
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 all the
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 will be examined in
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 same and fair condition.
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 of different types of questions
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 as multiple choices and essay tasks that give test-takers almost enough information about each individual student.
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, people who oppose
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students
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 have different intellectual capacities and they should not be judged merely by taking
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, some of the
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 perform much better on group tasks, some have the ability to manage a team, and, some have better research skills.
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another
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 types of evaluation techniques should
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, group projects to
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 teamwork ability or writing an essay to measure
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independent
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 what is mentioned above, the role of
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formal pen and
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exams
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to assess
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students
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 learning is undeniable. But,
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 to that, other forms of evaluations should be applied.
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Language Accuracy
Ensure consistency in spelling conventions (e.g. examinations vs. examminations), as consistency contributes to the clarity of your message.
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Example Usage
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal examinations
  • pen and paper
  • educational achievement
  • assess
  • standardized measure
  • knowledge and skills
  • develop skills
  • stressful
  • pressure
  • capture
  • abilities
  • potential
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