The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
The pie graphs detail the comparison of six different items'
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, which were utilized by young adults to watch television in
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named Canada between 2009 and 2019 years. Looking from
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prospective
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, the most widespread method to watch
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, after ten years the proportion made up only 4%,
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was not even one-eighth of the past glory.
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became much more popular after
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year, and had the highest percentage in
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pie. In 2009, the frequency of
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made up one-twentieth, but in 2019, it rose by around four times, and was the third in that year. The sum of the Conventional
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and of the Laptops or desktop
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did
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to figures of Tablets. In 2009, the gap between Desktop computers and Laptops
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2%. Surprisingly, after ten years their rates caught up
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, and it was 12% respectively.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • gadgets
  • utilized
  • age categories
  • watching TV channels
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • notable trends
  • increase/decrease
  • devices
  • decade
  • advancements in technology
  • user preferences
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • conclusion
  • implications
  • technology and media companies
  • lifestyle
  • habits
  • target age group
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