The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

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, which were utilized by young adults to watch television in

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named Canada between 2009 and 2019 years. Looking from

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, the most widespread method to watch

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was not even one-eighth of the past glory.

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pie. In 2009, the frequency of

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made up one-twentieth, but in 2019, it rose by around four times, and was the third in that year. The sum of the Conventional

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to figures of Tablets. In 2009, the gap between Desktop computers and Laptops

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2%. Surprisingly, after ten years their rates caught up

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, and it was 12% respectively.

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age categories
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The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might be this case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In some countries, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future?

20.The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were suitable and livable for people in those times. What problems will these ancient towns cause today? And what should be done to deal with that?

Many people are working at home rather than work place. Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but other suggest it will cause stress in the home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.