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INVITATION LETTER TOPIC . You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter, say:  what the content of the music concert is  where and when the music concert is  why you think your friend should go to this concert You should write at least 150 words.

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My dear friend Alex ! I hope my mail finds you well, it has been
long
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 time since
last
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our last
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 conversation, I hope you are doing well in your
study
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studies
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 as well, I am writing
you
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 to invite you to the music concert on the 13th of April. As
i
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 know, we are
waiting
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this
 musical concert, so
i
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I
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 prefer to go to
this
 event with you, I would like
to
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you to
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 join me to have
a
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fun and enjoy the moment
togother
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together
 as we love
this
 type of music, By the
way
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 it is
first
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 time to hold
this
 event in our town, Please do not miss
this
 chance. It is supposed to
hold
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be held
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this
 concert
outdoor
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, On the
gold
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 Coast beach, I have checked the tickets online,
I
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and I
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think the tickets will be sold out. I am looking forward to seeing you. Wish you all the best.
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Suitable Writing Tone
Starting with a warm greeting sets a friendly tone, which is excellent. Keeping a consistent welcoming tone throughout the letter strengthens your message.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
Ensure each paragraph has a single focused idea. Your letter mixes details about the concert and your excitement in the same paragraphs. Separating these ideas can improve readability.
Complete Response
Expanding on why you think your friend should attend, perhaps by mentioning specific artists or songs, could strengthen your persuasion.
Logical Structure
To improve logical structure, consider outlining your letter before writing. This ensures a clear progression from greeting, through the invitation, to the conclusion.
Tone
Your letter is imbued with enthusiasm and a genuine desire for your friend to join you, making the invitation both heartfelt and convincing.
Information Clarity
You did well in specifying the event’s details such as location and date, which are crucial in an invitation.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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