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The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The
two
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 given diagrams describe
two
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 types of hostel rooms which specific numbers of
people
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 can
use
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
maximum
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a maximum
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two
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of two
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people
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 can
use
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 the
room
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 of
type
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 A
with
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for
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 $50 per night.
In contrast
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,
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type
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a type
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B
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room
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 can be occupied by four
people
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, which can accept more
people
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 than
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type
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a type
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 A
room
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, with $90 per night. As
type
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B
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 can accept
two
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people
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 more than
type
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 A
room
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, it is shown that
type
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B
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room
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 costs $40/per night more than
type
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 A
room
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. In detail,
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type
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a type
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 A
room
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 has
two
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 single beds
which
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on which
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two
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people
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 can sleep. Next to single beds,
small
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a small
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 closet and
bathroom
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is
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are
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 placed. At the margin of the top right, there is a sink
so
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apply
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that visitors can
use
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 as a kitchen. As soon as entering the
type
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 A
room
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, visitors are able to
use
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stairs
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the stairs
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 on the right. Turning to
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type
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the type
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B
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room
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, there
are
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is
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 more
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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 than
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type
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in type
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 A
room
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such
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 as
sofa
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a sofa
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, TV, table in the middle of the
room
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 and refrigerator at the margin of the top left, respectively. As soon as entering the
room
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,
sink
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the sink
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 is placed in the straight and there is
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bathroom
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a bathroom
the bathroom
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 on the right. There is a closet between
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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 and
two
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 bunk beds which 4 customers can sleep. There is a
bathroom
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 next to bookshelves, which
type
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 A
room
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 does not have.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, people, use, room, type, b, bathroom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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