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Your workplace requires an interpreter to translate from one language to another during meetings. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter recommend someone to act as an interpreter; explain why the person is qualified for that role; say how the person can be contacted.

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Dear Mr. Manager, I am writing
this
 letter to recommend a
person
 who can act as an interpreter
which
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whom
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 you need
him
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apply
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to translate from French to
English
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 language. I am Sam, currently working as a Business Analyst in the Information Technology department at one of the world’s most prestigious companies.
In addition
, in my team, there is a
person
 who can communicate in English,
as well as
 in French.
Sometime
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, our team
also
utilise
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 him to act as a mediator during our French client meeting.
Furthermore
,
this
person
who
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achieved a tremendous number of awards
regard
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 to French language from his school and university. Apart from that,
this
person
 can
also
 help you to translate into our languages, like Hindi, Chinese and Spanish.
Moreover
, he gained a plethora of professional
certification
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certifications
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 from various international institutions.
Finally
, I would like to share some suggested ways to approach him for
this
 position.
First,
you can send an official email because he always prefers
email type
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of
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apply
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communication.
Second,
you can
also
 request our manager to send him as a temporary translator to your team. I hope you can understand my recommendation, and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sam
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Tone
Maintain a formal and consistent tone throughout the letter for a more professional impact.
Grammar
For clearer communication, replace 'which you need him to translate from French to English language' with a more grammatically correct structure, such as 'who you require for translating from French to English.'
Specificity
Use specific examples of the person’s achievements and experiences to strengthen your recommendation. Mentioning 'a tremendous number of awards' could be more impactful with details about one or two key awards.
Flow
Utilize transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs and within them for smoother reading.
Content
You've done a good job introducing the candidate and mentioning their skills in multiple languages.
Task Addressing
The suggested ways of contact were clearly addressed, which effectively answers all aspects of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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