Many city centers these days have traffic flow problems, causing congestion and pollution. One solution is to build fast ring roads on the outskirts of a city, taking traffic away from the centre. While this is helpful in some ways, it also causes new problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
think that Use synonyms
problem
Correct article usage
the problem
with
traffic jams in the city Change preposition
of
centers
should be solved by developing Change the spelling
centres
fast
ring Correct article usage
the fast
roads
industry in the suburbs. Use synonyms
This
essay totally disagrees with Linking Words
this
statement. Personally, I believe that ring Linking Words
roads
are not only the main Use synonyms
sourse
of continuous noise and air pollution, Correct your spelling
source
in addition
, it is a serious problem for the lifestyle of pedestrians and cyclists of that area.
At Linking Words
first,
building Linking Words
of
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apply
this
type of Linking Words
Use synonyms
roads systems
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road system
are
more often provided by cutting down the forests and destroying environmentally significant landscapes. Change the verb form
is
Such
areas produce a major amount of oxygen and are crucial for the health of local residents. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the ability to travel faster by private car discourages Linking Words
people
from using Use synonyms
the
public transport, which causes far less air pollution by transporting more Correct article usage
apply
people
by one bus or tram.
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In addition
, Linking Words
existence
of ring Add an article
the existence
roads
has a negative impact Use synonyms
to
pedestrians and cyclists. Change preposition
on
For example
, when we Linking Words
had travelling
to Dubai city with my immediate family Verb problem
travelled
last
year, Linking Words
instead
of walking down the streets, we had to get a taxi even for a tiny distance because of Linking Words
ring
road system, which we were not able to cross. Add an article
the ring
a ring
Such
road systems made local Linking Words
people
, who prefer walking or cycling, Use synonyms
to
choose between Fix the infinitive
apply
make
a long detour to cross the road or Change the form of the verb
making
travel
by car.
In conclusion, despite Wrong verb form
travelling
constructing
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construction
the
fast ring Change preposition
of the
roads
could be helpful for avoiding traffic congestion, it has been increasingly noticed, that it would have a significantly negative impact Use synonyms
to
pollution and Change preposition
on
people
’s Use synonyms
life
in the suburbs.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
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