You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given chart demonstrates the
percentage
of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 to 2015. In
overall
view mobile phone users and computer users, the initial
percentage
is same and these
two
categories
strike at peak position
at the end
of the given interval of the
year
.
Moreover
, The lowest
percentage
achieved
at the end
of the given
year
interval is for MP3 Players.In the forthcoming paragraph, I explain deeply
this
chart information.
To begin
with,We rectify that there are four types of people who own household devices from the span of 1995 to 2015.
Firstly
two
categories
mobile phones and computers peaked at their highest position between 1995 to 2015 and the
percentage
was
initially
the same nearly about 8% for both
categories
and suddenly increased to 70% in the
year
2000.
However
,personal computer users gradually increase from the initial
year
to the end of the
year
. Other than that,the Popularity of the
two
categories
tablet and mp3 player is less in comparison to the other
two
categories
player
initially
started at 15% and in the
year
2000 the computer and mp3 user percentages were the same at about 25% and
then
the mp3 player popularity
further
increased slowly ended nearly about 32% in 2015.
In addition
, there were no people owing tablets before the
year
2000 and it became popular after the
year
2000 and peaked at 72 % in the
year
2015.
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