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Having different languages makes it difficult for people of different nationalities to communicate with each other. It would be better if there was only one language in the world What are the advantages and disadvantages of everyone in the world speaking the same language?

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There is a widely held perception that communication among various nationalities becomes way more difficult because they speak different
languages
. And it would be way better to have only
one
 common
language
, so
people
 will not have any difficulties
while
 talking to
people
 from other nationalities.
However
, there are both pros and cons when we apply it to the real
world
. Let's begin by looking at the
advanatges
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advantages
 of speaking only
one
language
 all over the
world
.
One
 of the main positives would probably be the fact that no
one
 would struggle with
language
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 barrier. What I mean by
this
 is that nowadays, even if
people
 learn
one
language
 for many years they cannot speak it like native speakers.
This
 causes a huge problem for
language
 learners,
however
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 if everyone
would speak
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 the same
language
 from their childhood,
this
 problem would disappear. Turning to the other side of the argument every nation's culture is hidden in their
language
.
And
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this
 leads to the fact that
cultures
 will lose their unique part, possibly
along with
 their traditions and customs.
Moreover
, learning new
languages
 helps
people
 to improve their brain activity and makes their outlook wider, which is
one
 of the main positive sides of learning new
langauges
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languages
. To put it in a nutshell, all the reasons that were mentioned before lead us to
a
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 conclusion that speaking
one
langauge
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language
 throughout the
world
 may have some positive sides, but
along with
 that
cultures
 will lose their unique traditions customs and so on.
Moreover
, in
this
 case, the majority of
people
 will stop learning new
languages
 and
this
 will lead to the fact that
people
 will stop learning other
cultures
 and the history of those
cultures
 which would affect their outlook in a negative way. Personally, I believe that having various
languages
 around the
world
 is important and countries should not change their nation's
languages
 to
one
 common.
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Be sure to give concrete examples to bolster your arguments. Sharing real-world implications or historical anecdotes can add depth to your discussion.
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Transition smoothly between paragraphs with linking phrases that connect not just within paragraphs but across the entire essay.
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Try to delve deeper into the implications of your argument, considering more diverse perspectives for a well-rounded essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion by presenting a clear thesis.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay benefits from a structured approach, with clear delineation of advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
You maintain a coherent argument throughout, showing both sides of the issue which enriches your discussion.

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