These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career seversl times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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contemporary
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era, many people have the tendency to shift from one
employer
to another more often than before during their course of
lives
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. It can have various upsides and downsides which will be examined
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To begin
with, there are numerous positive impacts that come with changing jobs. First and foremost is the growth of an individual's skills at different
jobsites
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job sites
.
While
a
person
changes his company, he gets
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to improve his expertise in his present set of talents
also
he could gain experience in other fields as well.
For example
,
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current
employers
generally never tend to change
responsibilities
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of employees because they do not want to lose a stable employee but at a new workplace the
employer
tests the employee at different positions to know their adroitness.
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, the people who change their workplaces frequently are able to negotiate their salary better than their present
employer
.
For instance
, the present
employers
only raise salary to a certain limited extent but the new
employer
offers better income offers
due to
past achievements of the jobseeker.
On the contrary
, there are some shortcomings of
this
trend.
First
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problem
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when a
person
is not able to concentrate
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one field of interest and
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changing of roles at varied organizations
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a lack of focus.
Consequently
, it leads to
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pay
raise
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by
employer
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employers
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and chances to rise to higher positions become
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.
Thus
, new careers may not allow an individual to
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an expertise
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field.
Finally
, another reason ascribing to the negative side is the inability to maintain connections within the same career when a
person
can have an opportunity to create relations in the long run.
While
a
person
shifts from one job to another he cannot make strong relations with his colleagues and boss because many
employers
prefer
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retention of human resources.
Thus
, they do not pay attention to employees who take interest for
short term
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. Even they will not readily train an employee properly before a
probabtion
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probation
period of six months or even a year.
Thus
, a
person
could miss certain great options of training which only
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and patient players achieve in their fields.
To conclude
, there are
plethora
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of positives and negatives of continuous change
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employers
.
Although
, an individual may better negotiate his pay and new workplace
alongwith
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along with
chances of learning new skills are provided
but
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some
employers
may identify
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players and may never consider them for their job or even some people may not be able to gain expertise in their career.
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