These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career seversl times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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era, many people have the tendency to shift from one
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to another more often than before during their course of
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. It can have various upsides and downsides which will be examined
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with, there are numerous positive impacts that come with changing jobs. First and foremost is the growth of an individual's skills at different
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changes his company, he gets
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to improve his expertise in his present set of talents
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he could gain experience in other fields as well.
For example
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current
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generally never tend to change
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of employees because they do not want to lose a stable employee but at a new workplace the
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tests the employee at different positions to know their adroitness.
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, the people who change their workplaces frequently are able to negotiate their salary better than their present
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only raise salary to a certain limited extent but the new
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offers better income offers
due to
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past achievements of the jobseeker.
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, there are some shortcomings of
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trend.
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when a
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is not able to concentrate
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one field of interest and
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changing of roles at varied organizations
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a lack of focus.
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, it leads to
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and chances to rise to higher positions become
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, new careers may not allow an individual to
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field.
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, another reason ascribing to the negative side is the inability to maintain connections within the same career when a
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can have an opportunity to create relations in the long run.
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shifts from one job to another he cannot make strong relations with his colleagues and boss because many
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retention of human resources.
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, they do not pay attention to employees who take interest for
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. Even they will not readily train an employee properly before a
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period of six months or even a year.
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could miss certain great options of training which only
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and patient players achieve in their fields.
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, there are
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of positives and negatives of continuous change
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, an individual may better negotiate his pay and new workplace
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chances of learning new skills are provided
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some
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may identify
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players and may never consider them for their job or even some people may not be able to gain expertise in their career.

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