The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The two given maps illustrate the difference of
Brisbane
’s layout in 1975 and now, respectively. Through the given maps, it is noticed that how the city of
Brisbane
has been changed.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that Victoria Bridge is installed on
Brisbane
Correct article usage
the Brisbane
show examples
River these days,
whereas
there was no bridge in 1975. Unlike in 1975,
road
Correct article usage
the road
show examples
currently has been removed at the bottom of
Brisbane
River. In detail, there were houses on the upper-left side of the map in 1975.
However
, houses were replaced
to
Change preposition
with
show examples
apartments these days.
In addition
, the city is planning to construct
park
Correct article usage
a park
show examples
until
Change preposition
in
show examples
2050 next to apartments. Turning to the details of the bottom of
Brisbane
river
Capitalize word
River
show examples
, there were solely factories in 1975.
However
, there
were
Wrong verb form
are
show examples
no longer factories nowadays.
Instead
of factories, there are restaurants on the opposite side of apartments.
Supermarket
Correct article usage
The supermarket
show examples
and hospital
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
also
located next to each other, in front of restaurants.
Submitted by dmdql2708 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words brisbane with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: