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The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show the city layout of Brisbane between 1975 and the current day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The two given maps illustrate the difference of
Brisbane
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’s layout in 1975 and now, respectively. Through the given maps, it is noticed that how the city of
Brisbane
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 has been changed.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that Victoria Bridge is installed on
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Brisbane
Correct article usage
the Brisbane
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 River these days,
whereas
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 there was no bridge in 1975. Unlike in 1975,
road
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the road
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 currently has been removed at the bottom of
Brisbane
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 River. In detail, there were houses on the upper-left side of the map in 1975.
However
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, houses were replaced
to
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with
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 apartments these days.
In addition
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, the city is planning to construct
park
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a park
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until
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in
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 2050 next to apartments. Turning to the details of the bottom of
Brisbane
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river
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River
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, there were solely factories in 1975.
However
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, there
were
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are
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 no longer factories nowadays.
Instead
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 of factories, there are restaurants on the opposite side of apartments.
Supermarket
Correct article usage
The supermarket
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 and hospital
is
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are
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also
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 located next to each other, in front of restaurants.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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