The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.
The graph depicts the number of various modes of transportation during six decades in the UK.
It is clear that
both cars
and trains
had an upward trend totally while
buses
had a downward trend in these years.
In 1970, the UK people used cars
more than other modes as result
, it stood at Correct article usage
a result
first
stage with 5 Add an article
the first
million
and buses
saw second
stage with 3.5 Change the article
the second
sum
. Change to a plural noun
sums
Trains
had fewest
popularity and 2 Change the article
the fewest
million
used it
approximately. During Correct pronoun usage
apply
first
decades both Correct article usage
the first
cars
and trains
experienced a slight growth to 6.1 and 3.1 lot respectively. Buses
maintained the same level(4 million
).
From 1980 to2000
, car users had a noticeable climb to 7.5 Correct your spelling
to 2000
million
and the number of train travelers
experienced a steady increase to 3 Change the spelling
travellers
million
however
, bus commuters had a slow fell
to 3.8 Replace the word
fall
million
.
Between 2000 and 2010 both trains
and cars
commuters stabilized at 3 and 7 million
respectively while
the range of bus passengers followed a marginal drop by .5 million
.
From 2010 onward, people who traveled
by Change the spelling
travelled
cars
showed a remarkable rise(9 Fix the agreement mistake
car
million
) and also
train users doubled at the same time whereas
, buses
had a moderate decline by
1 Change preposition
of
million
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