The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.

The line graph illustrates the average number of UK worker traveling by three different transport from 1970 to 2030.
The graph depicts the number of various modes of transportation during six decades in the UK.
It is clear that
both
cars
and
trains
had an upward trend totally
while
buses
had a downward trend in these years. In 1970, the UK people used
cars
more than other modes as
result
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a result
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, it stood at
first
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the first
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stage with 5
million
and
buses
saw
second
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the second
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stage with 3.5
sum
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sums
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.
Trains
had
fewest
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the fewest
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popularity and 2
million
used
it
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apply
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approximately. During
first
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the first
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decades both
cars
and
trains
experienced a slight growth to 6.1 and 3.1 lot respectively.
Buses
maintained the same level(4
million
). From 1980
to2000
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to 2000
, car users had a noticeable climb to 7.5
million
and the number of train
travelers
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travellers
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experienced a steady increase to 3
million
however
, bus commuters had a slow
fell
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fall
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to 3.8
million
. Between 2000 and 2010 both
trains
and
cars
commuters stabilized at 3 and 7
million
respectively
while
the range of bus passengers followed a marginal drop by .5
million
. From 2010 onward, people who
traveled
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travelled
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by
cars
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car
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showed a remarkable rise(9
million
) and
also
train users doubled at the same time
whereas
,
buses
had a moderate decline
by
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of
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1
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, trains, buses, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • average number
  • traveling
  • transportation
  • period
  • analyzed
  • trends
  • significant
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaked
  • examination
  • growth
  • decline
  • factors
  • contributed
  • noticeable
  • increase
  • decrease
  • speculating
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • usage
  • shifts
  • preference
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • environmental concerns
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • conclusion
  • summarizing
  • findings
  • preferences
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