The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.write at least 150 words
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The diagrams illustrate the changes West Park Secondary
school
has Capitalize word
School
transformed
over Verb problem
undergone
duration
of 60 years since it is Add an article
the duration
a duration
establishment
in 1950.
Add an article
an establishment
the establishment
Although
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
pieces
have changed since 1950, the school has remained the same. Change preposition
of pieces
Also
playground
Correct article usage
the playground
has
invariable. It is forecast that the playground should be a friendly environment for the children. Verb problem
is
Likewise
the main school building has not changed at all. By 1980, Add a comma
Likewise,
major
change Add an article
a major
the major
has take
place, replacing the houses with car Wrong verb form
had taken
park
and science Fix the agreement mistake
parks
block
. Fix the agreement mistake
blocks
This
is related to providing students with course related
facilities. Add a hyphen
course-related
Also
the replacement of farmland Add a comma
Also,
to
sports Change preposition
with
field
is Fix the agreement mistake
fields
due to
changes in society and time, either
it is Correct word choice
and
cause
of the decrease of Add an article
the cause
a cause
agriculture
enterprise in 30 years. In 2010, the sports field and playground space Replace the word
agricultural
decrease
.
Presumably, Wrong verb form
decreased
this
is due to
population growth and car ownership. In addition
to
it is Change preposition
apply
realated
to the fact that people are less active and sporty, Correct your spelling
related
children
prefer to stay Correct word choice
and children
indoor
Correct your spelling
indoors
instead
of playing outside.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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