You have recently moved to a new company and you want to write to the manager.In your letter. •Introduce yourself •mention what you have done since you moved to the company •and ask to meet the manager to discuss your needs and concerns.
Dear Jonathan
The reason why I am writing
this
letter to you I
have hot some demands about your Add a missing verb
is I
office
. Therefore
I am writing this
.My name is Antony,I am 25 years old.Before I was
worked sales department manager in Apple Unnecessary verb
apply
company
. I have been working
Add the preposition
working for
this
company
since 2020 years. But nowadays cause of some problems with my boss so, I left this
company
, and I want to work in your office
. I am going to meet you if you got
free time. I should ask some questions about your Verb problem
have
company
. If I work in your office
I need comfortable
workplace and a bit Correct article usage
a comfortable
of
more Change preposition
apply
months
salary. It is my hope that we will Change noun form
months'
month's
able
to arrange to meet at your Add a missing verb
be able
office
before the end of the month.
I look forward to meeting with you and learning more about your company
in the near future.
Yours faithfully,
AntonySubmitted by soglomovsarvar on
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Introduction
Remember to provide a clear introduction, explaining the purpose of your letter in the first paragraph. This will help set the context for the reader.
Structure
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a separate idea: introduce yourself, mention your recent activities in the company, and finally, request a meeting to discuss your needs.
Language Use
Aim for clarity and accuracy in your writing. For instance, ensure correct use of past and present tenses, and try to correct phrases like 'I have hot some demands' to 'I have some demands' or requests.
Tone
Adjust the tone to be more professionally appropriate. Phrases such as 'I have hot some demands' might seem too direct or confrontational. A more suitable phrase could be 'I would like to discuss some suggestions or matters important to me.'
Content
Initiative to introduce yourself and mention your background, which helps establish your identity and credibility.
Proactiveness
Expressing a desire to meet and discuss reflects proactivity in addressing your professional needs, which is positive.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.