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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There is a graph about the three ores, which are
copper
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,
nickel
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 and zinc of mean
value
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 price per
month
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 in 2014. The most changeable ore’s
value
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 is
nickel
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. The highest cost of
nickel
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 was 6 in January.
However
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, after a
month
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, it had declined from 6 to -3 for 5 months. The lowest
nickel
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value
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 in 2014 was -3 in June. After the
month
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, it had been stable for 3 months, but the cost of
nickel
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 was reduced from -1 to -2 in October. After a
month
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, it started to increase from -2 to 1. It sustained from November and December. In January,
copper
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 and zinc prices were 2 and 1. There is a difference between
copper
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 and zinc’s price trend. In February, zinc’s
value
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 increased from 1 to 3.
On the contrary
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, another one decreased from 2 to 1. The 3 common points between two ores. First of all, their values displayed a decreasing trend from February to June. The second point is that they were stable
price
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prices
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 from June to September. The
last
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 one is that the
value
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 trends of
copper
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 and zinc increased after October.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, value, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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