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Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

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Dear Ryan, I’m really excited about your plan to work in India for a few months. I fondly remember about us
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 for hours in school classes back in the
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. I would feel joyful meeting you back after these many years. I’d suggest you
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work in Bangalore
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 which is in the south. I know it is a fantastic
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 to move to
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 because I have lived there for nearly 7 to 8 years during my college days. It
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 a Metro
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, and has all the facilities you could think of. It has subways, 2 airports and a
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 transport system for easy commute. It’s known for start-ups as well. The
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 never sleeps and has hustlers
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 different parts of India. The
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 might be a bit costly but there are a ton of job opportunities as well. I would recommend you to go for a
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 job as I know you are pretty darn good at it. There are plenty of
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 software companies over there.
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, you can easily make new buddies, as there are many amazing Nightclubs and pubs.
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 place has many young boys and girls from different parts of India and it’s fun to talk to them. The
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 has various social events happening in shopping malls and clubs where it’s easy to gossip and socialize with people. I’m really thrilled to see you here. Warm wishes, John.

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coherence cohesion
Continue to provide clear explanations within each paragraph as you've done here, ensuring a strong logical flow between ideas.
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You could enhance the letter by adding specific examples or personal anecdotes. This adds depth to your suggestions and makes your letter more engaging.
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Make sure to vary your sentence structures to maintain the reader’s interest and to demonstrate a wide range of language abilities.
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The letter has a friendly and welcoming tone, perfectly matching the task's requirement to write to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter organized and easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and opening statements are warmly and appropriately phrased, creating a genuine sense of connection.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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