The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.
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The bar graph compares the gender distribution of
students
in six art-related programs at a UK university in 2011.
Overall
, female
students
outnumbered males in most subjects, except for Art & Design. Communication and Media
Study
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had the highest female
enrollments
,
while
English language & Literature attracted the most male pupils, and both were popular choices. The number of female
enrollments
varied across the fields, ranging from around 120
students
to 270
students
. Communication & Media Study had the highest enrollment with approximately 270 female
students
. English language & Literature
closely
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followed
with
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250 females, and Linguistics had around 240 female pupils. The figures for female
enrollments
in the remaining three fields showed slight variations, from 150 persons in Philosophy, Art & Design to 125 in History & Archeology. Male
enrollments
were significantly lower compared to their female counterparts. English language & Literature had the highest number of males, with approximately 225
enlistment
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. In Linguistics, Communication & Media Study, and Art & Design, the figures ranged from around 180 to 210 male enlistment. Philosophy
and
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History & Archeology had a relatively low enrollment of only 50-75 male
students
, making them the only subjects with fewer than 100 male pupils.
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