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The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graphs show the size of the ozone hole in Antarctic and three types of damaging gases that damage the Antarctic ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graphs illustrate how the
hole
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 in the ozone layer changed in Antarctica,
while
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also
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 outlining how much emissions there were from three different types of damaging gasses over a 20-year time period.
Overall
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, the
hole
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 in the ozone layer continued to gradually expand,
while
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 CFC-11 decreased and CFC-12 and N20 both increased. One notable observation is that the size of the
hole
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 in the ozone layer continues to grow bigger. The size was
initially
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 only about 400 square kilometres
during
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in
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 1980.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the
hole
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 slightly decreased during 1990 and 1993 to approximately 1200 square kilometres.
Thereafter
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, the size expanded significantly to about 3700 square kilometres.
Furthermore
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,
gas
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 types B and C gradually increased,
while
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gas
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 type A decreased.
Moreover
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,
gas
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type
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types
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 B and C are positively correlated as both
inceased
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decreased
,
however
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, N20 only started to be released during 1990. During 1980,
gas
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 type A was the largest emissioned
gas
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 at about 70 million tonnes, which decreased to the least at 7 million tonnes during 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hole, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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