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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.
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The bar chart and pie chart illustrate the number of
work
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hours
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 per week and the proportion of
stress
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 among eight different occupations.
Overall
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, it can be seen that businessmen spend their lifetime working the most,
while
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 a majority of lecturers are suffering from illness caused by
stress
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. In a week, the businessmen dedicate their time to
work
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 almost 70
hours
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. Movie producers came second place with 60
hours
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. Only roughly 25
hours
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 were spent by lecturers. The other jobs
work
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 less than 60
hours
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 a week and are different by 5
hours
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.
On the other hand
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, the lecturers seem to get
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stress
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 more than other jobs, which occupy 25%. Followed by entertainment producers and doctors at 18% and 15% respectively. Chefs and lawyers are likely to have equal
stress
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 from their
work
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 which is represented at 8%.
However
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, programmers are affected by
stress
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 the least which is only 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, hours, stress with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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