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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview

#restaurant #advertisement #manager #newspaper #job #suitability #interview
Dear Sir or Madam, I saw an
avertisement
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advertisement
 in the 'News on Sunday' newspaper in respect of the vacancy
of
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 a
restaurent
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restaurant
 manager. I am writing to you to express my interest
to apply
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in applying
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 for that particular job. I am currently working as a chef in a 3-star hotel and I am responsible
to bake
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for baking
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 different kinds of pastries
as well as
cook
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 various dishes. I
also
 oversee the work of 5 cooks and ensure that the work is being done up to the required standards. Having worked in
this
 field for the
last
 10 years, I have great experience and have
developped
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developed
 my culinary skills. I have been awarded for 2 consecutive years as the best chef.
According to
 me, I will be a good fit for
this
 job. I will be most happy to attend an interview to discuss
further
 on same. I am free on Wednesday and Friday afternoon. I am attaching a copy of my curriculum vitae as well. You can contact me
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 my email address or my phone number directly. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Sarah
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has a logical structure, ensuring that it is easy to follow. To further enhance coherence, consider more varied transitional phrases to smoothly connect your ideas.
Task Achievement
Although your letter addresses all parts of the task, you can improve task achievement by providing more specific examples or experiences that directly relate to the managerial aspects of the job, beyond just cooking and supervising cooks.
Greeting and Closing
Your introduction and closing are well structured, creating a polite and professional tone throughout.
Logical Structure
The letter is divided into clear paragraphs, each dedicated to a different aspect of the task, which helps readability and organization.
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