Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensave the survival of local languages and if so, how?

English
become the worldwide
language
in
modern
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world.
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over the world, people
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the
English
language
.
Moreover
,
English
in schools often
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teach
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teaches
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to
students
rather
their
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native
language
but if
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their mother tongs it can
dying
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out. In my point of view, native languages should give preference in
school
by organizing
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competition
events and
writting
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writing
the
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slogans on
walls
. To commence with
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view,
English
is vital to teach in
school
because it is the main
language
of
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developed nation. If
students
learn
English
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at in
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in
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an
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early
ages
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, they can go abroad
for
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study and face
less
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difficulties
in
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language
barriers and they have more
opperunities
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opportunities
in different sectors.
For example
, a survey shows by CBC
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percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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are
English
language
speaker
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speakers
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.
Hence
,
learn
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the english
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english
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language
makes
easy
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to survive in developed countries. Moving towards my opinion,
school
needs to organize
competition
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competitions
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and
writes
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write
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the
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apply
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slogan
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slogans
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on
walls
for
survival
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the survival
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of
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the nation
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nation
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language
.
Firstly
, schools need to create
interest
to speak
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in speaking
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native
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the native
a native
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language
and
needs
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to organize
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a competition
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competition
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competitions
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on
school
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the school
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level, state level and
nation
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level and give some
prize
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prizes
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on
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for
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winning.
This
will create
the
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interest
in
students
to learn more about
local
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the local
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language
.
Moreover
, schools and government need to write. The slogan on
school
walls
in
native
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the native
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language
so
students
can read when they see and government need to put sign board in
thier
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their
local
language
so it will not diminish.
For instance
, Kerala
start
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putting the raid and village name
sign
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signs
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in
local
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the local
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language
along with
English
.
Therefore
,
competition
enhance
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enhances
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the
interest
in
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of
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students
and slogan helps to preserve the native languages.
To conclude
, learning
a
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English
is not bag because it is
worldwide
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a worldwide
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language
but
school
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schools
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and
government
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the government
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to take
necessary
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the necessary
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step
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steps
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to preserve the native languages by creating
the
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apply
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interest
in
students
as well as
writting
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writing
on the
walls
.
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Task Achievement
Your essay presents a clear argument and provides examples to support your views, which is excellent. However, there's room to strengthen your essay by offering deeper insights and more varied examples.
Language Use
Consider using a wider range of sentence structures and vocabulary to improve clarity, and to make your essay more engaging for the reader.
Language Use
Be mindful of spellings ('opperunities' should be 'opportunities', 'writting' should be 'writing', 'raids' should be 'roads', etc.) and grammar to ensure your writing is easily understood.
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Content
You provide a balanced view by discussing both the importance of English and the significance of preserving local languages, which enriches your argument.
Content
The use of examples, like the survey by CBC and the initiative in Kerala, is very good for supporting your main points.

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