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Band 5.5

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish you complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter -Say who you are -Give details about the accident -Suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents. Write at least 150 words. You do Not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Georgiana Liu living near one of your branches in downtown Stouffville. I am writing to bring to your attention the accident
happened
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that happened
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 to me inside your supermarket
last
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 Sunday afternoon. As usual, I was there to buy some groceries. When I passed through the entrance of the washroom, I suddenly fell slip over the floor cleaner came from the mop. It could be worse if I didn’t protect my neck and head with my hands. Fortunately, I just got small bruising on my rear end from
this
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 accident. Your staff
had
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apologized to me and
taken
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took
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 me to the hospital.
However
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, I am still in a state of shock because I can’t imagine how it could be worse if
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 happened to an elder
instead
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 of me. I would be grateful if your staff could take
an
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apply
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action to prevent
this
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 kind of
accidents
Fix the agreement mistake
accident
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 from happening again by
settling
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setting
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 a warning sign every time they clean the floor. I trust that you will address
this
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 concern as soon as possible.
Correct the word
Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Georgiana Liu

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Grammar
Try to avoid small grammatical mistakes, such as subject-verb agreement and correct use of articles for an even stronger impact.
Sentence Variety
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging.
Task Response
You clearly introduced yourself and described the accident with specific details, which effectively addressed the tasks required.
Task Achievement
Your suggestion for preventing similar accidents was practical and clear, contributing to a strong task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is well-organized, with a logical flow from presenting the incident to offering suggestions for improvement.
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