The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
The two bar graphs show information about the percentage of four
age
groups
and both genders that spend their time on screen in
reality
and game shows.
Overall
, it can be seen that females spend more time watching
reality
shows,
while
males consider game performances. There was
also
a relatively similar difference in
age
groups
between the two
groups
of shows.
To begin
with, the number of women who allocated their leisure time to watching
reality
shows was 70%;
this
number was double that of men.
In addition
, there was a gradual increase throughout the
age
group, starting at exactly half for teenagers and reaching around 70% for adults. In terms of game shows, there was a similar portion for both genders, around 60% for males and a little lower for females; there was
also
less juxtaposed to adolescence, which reached 10% higher. Compared to
reality
, the patterns of
age
groups
fluctuated.
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