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The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates the information regarding the consumption of four types of meat in Spain, spanning from 2000 to 2011.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 fish was the least popular protein for individuals' food options
while
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 chicken was the only one that continued its increasing tendency during the period. In 1979, beef was the dominant
choices
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 when considered to have
meats
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meat
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, with over 200
grams
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beong
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being
 consumed per person weekly.
However
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, it started to decrease and hit its lowest point
at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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 with
appoximately
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approximately
 100
grams
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, except for a slight growth from 1984 to 1989.
In contrast
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, being consumed just under 150
grams
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 a week per person, chicken observed a steady increase during the given timeframe;
moreover
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, almost exceeding 250
grams
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 consumptions in 2004, creating an over
a
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apply
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100 gap with
other
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the other
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 three.
On the other hand
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, every individual
comsumed
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consumed
 150
grams
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 and
slighty
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slightly
 over 50
grams
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 of lamb and fish per week
resepectively
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respectively
,
then
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had
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experienced a decline before lamb
comsumption
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consumption
increasing
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 to roughly 70
grams
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at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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