The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world.

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the chart illustrates how many people use five different communication services worldwide from 1998 to 2008.

overall

, there was an increase in users of all five communication services, with cellular

phone

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witnessing the most dramatic rise to become by far the most

user

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from 2002 onward. the number of

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to landline service started at 15

million

, after which it

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a peak at 20

million

and levelling off in a final.

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, not until the year 2002 did people start using fixed and mobile broadband, the figures for those two services increased slightly, reaching 4

million

final

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year. 5

million

people subscribed

cellular

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phone service in 1998, with a significant

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to roughly 18

million

in 4

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later, and a final dramatic growth to just over 65

million

at the end

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. The figure for internet service saw similar changes, but lesser extent, which increased from just under 5

million

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exactly

exacly

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exactly

million

, followed by a final levelling off

at the end

period

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The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world.

Some people argue that governments should make laws regarding people’s nutrition and food choices to improve public health while others contend that this is the freedom of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some countries around the world men and women are having children later in life.What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problem, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?