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The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world.

The line graph shows the number of people who used different communication services in the world.
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the chart illustrates how many people use five different communication services worldwide from 1998 to 2008.
overall
, there was an increase in users of all five communication services, with cellular
phone
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 witnessing the most dramatic rise to become by far the most
user
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users
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 from 2002 onward. the number of
subscriber
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subscribers
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 to landline service started at 15
million
, after which it
reach
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 a peak at 20
million
 and levelling off in a final.
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, not until the year 2002 did people start using fixed and mobile broadband, the figures for those two services increased slightly, reaching 4
million
 in
final
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the final
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 year. 5
million
 people subscribed
cellular
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 phone service in 1998, with a significant
increased
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 to roughly 18
million
 in 4
year
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 later, and a final dramatic growth to just over 65
million
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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. The figure for internet service saw similar changes, but lesser extent, which increased from just under 5
million
 to
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exactly
exacly
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exactly
 20
million
, followed by a final levelling off
at the end
 period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication services
  • overall trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • traditional vs. modern
  • technological advancements
  • regional disparities
  • adoption and usage
  • future predictions
  • sociopolitical events
  • altering usage patterns
  • detailed analysis
  • popularity
  • emphasize
  • demonstrate
  • surpass
  • overshadow
  • implications
  • innovation
  • transition
  • dominance
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