First impression is important. Some people think doing well in an interview is key to securing a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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interview
,
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the human resources team. Showing a
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clothes means respect to the citizens
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meet with.
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from various
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evidence of how important fashion can affect our vibe. How to transfer our knowledge through communication is key
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in job
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. Someone who can explain their capability of work with a
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incline to get great exposure in
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scientiest
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of her work.
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positive feedback sooner or later on job
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occupation. Society must take responsibility
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Make sure your introduction clearly presents your opinion on the topic. You've done a good job, but it could be clearer for the reader.
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coherence cohesion
Maintain a formal style throughout your essay. Avoid using informal language and ensure that your essay adheres to formal writing conventions.
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You have successfully addressed the prompt by giving a clear opinion and supporting it throughout the essay.

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