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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The table gives the data on railway public transportation in five countries, namely London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Tokyo, and Los Angeles,
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 the year, distance, and maximum
capacity
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 of the trains provided.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the oldest MRT had a relatively higher duration and quantity compared to the newest transport.
To begin
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 with, London produced the oldest
train
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 compared to other cities;
furthermore
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,
this
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train
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 had the longest total limit at 1100
km
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.
However
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, the maximum
capacity
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 was overtaken by MRT produced in Tokyo, which accounted for 1434 million per year.
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, Paris was the second-oldest
train
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 and had the biggest length and
capacity
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, with almost 600
km
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 and 850
km
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the other newest trains produced the least distance and dimensions. Los Angeles'
train
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 that was produced in 2001 had the smallest length, at just 14
km
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, and a carrying
capacity
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 of no more than 100 million.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words capacity, train, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • date opened
  • kilometres of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • oldest
  • recent additions
  • route length
  • network
  • transport
  • massive
  • annually
  • comparatively shorter
  • follows closely behind
  • lowest number
  • second highest
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