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Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free in their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 claim that
workers
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 should wear
uniforms
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. Others allege that
people
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 should be free in their choice.
Body paragraph 1
Nowadays, many
people
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 claim that
workers
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 should wear
uniforms
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. Certainly,
this
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 good idea. If
workers
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 wear
uniforms
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, they will feel comfortable
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 different other
workers
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 and
people
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.
In other words
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, they stand out from the rest.
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, doctors, teachers, police, firefighters, waiters and lots more. Doctors have to
uniforms
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. Because they take care of patients and must follow hygiene.
Body paragraph 2
Other
people
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 say that they don't have to wear a
uniform
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. To tell the truth,
workers
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 shouldn't wear
uniforms
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. They should wear whatever clothes they want. because when they wear the clothes they like, they feel free and comfortable.
for example
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, teacher, salesman and similar professions. The question
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 arises as to why the teacher should not wear a
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. if the teacher is older, he may feel uncomfortable and not be able to explain the lesson well.
Conclusion
In conclusion, in my view not all professions require a
uniform
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. because there are professions that require a
uniform
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 and those that do not.
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, it requires a
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 from a doctor and a fireman.
Seller
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Sellers
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 and coaches are not required to wear
uniforms
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.

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Structure
Try to maintain a clear structure throughout the essay. Start with an introduction that presents the topic and your thesis statement. Develop each argument in separate paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Flow
Ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next. Use transitional phrases to help guide the reader through your argument.
Examples
Support your main points with specific examples or reasons. This adds weight to your arguments and demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.
Language Use
Work on varying your sentence structure and using a range of vocabulary to make your writing more engaging and to accurately convey your ideas.
Conclusion
Revisit the conclusion to ensure it effectively summarizes the essay's main arguments and clearly states your opinion.
Balanced discussion
You've effectively discussed both sides of the argument.
Effective conclusion
Your conclusion provides a clear summary of your own opinion, reinforcing the essay's main points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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