Some people like to spend their leisure time with their colleagues, while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Is it a good thing to spend leisure time with a colleague?
Some
people
believe that coming and going with their colleagues
so that they can have leisure time
together makes a good friendship on the other hand
other people
think their privacy
should be considered. Here I will discuss whether is it a good thing to spend leisure time
with a colleague.
However
, we need to have some friends
during
our life Change preposition
in
due to
the fact that sometimes we require attention from our friends
. For example
,psychology scientists have informed on television that most people
have some necessities in terms of financial and other problems which should be addressed just by their friends
. Individuals usually say their mystery to their friends
and they can get a good resolve. people
usually believe that if they had consulted with their friends
about their problem, they would have a better situation now .
Correct your spelling
This
this
idea is common among people
in our country At the same time
colleagues
may be a suitable option as a friend.
On the other
hand
Some individuals believe that having a deep friendship canAdd a comma
hand,
a disturbance
their Replace the word
disturb
privacy
.
Correct your spelling
For
for instance
, most people
do not like their colleagues
coming into their homes due to
the fact that such
individuals usually prefer preserving their family's privacy
. They like to contact with
their friend just in their office or Change preposition
apply
work
. These Change preposition
at work
people
argue that if they spend their time
with their colleagues
more and more, they will find many issues in the future. This
group of people
have experienced , they say if we had not had deep friendships with our colleagues
we would not have found a lot of issues.
In conclusion, I can say we should have relations with our colleagues
but not very deeply due to
maintaining our privacy
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