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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart illustrates the percentage variances of city residents between four countries in Asia, spanning from 1970 to 2020, with the forecast
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 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all four countries experienced a growth in the population of city dwellers, with Malaysia
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 out as possessing the highest percentage among the four. At the same time,
according to
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 its projection, the increasing tendency will likely continue into the future. In 1970, city inhabitants in Malaysia accounted for 30% of its population, compared to Indonesia’s 15%. They both witnessed a steady
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while
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 considerable rise, with roughly 75% and 50% of people residing in cities, simultaneously, being predicted to exceed 80% and 60% respectively.
On the other hand
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, people who resided in cities consisted of slightly over 30% and almost 20% of the population of the Philippines and Thailand respectively at the start of
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 timeframe;
moreover
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, a gradual increase can
also
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 be seen, similar to the other two, despite the Philippines had gone through a drop by 2010. Both countries are anticipated to reach roughly 50% of urban inhabitants
at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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