The pie chart beolw three regions ro les procuctive. The table shows how these causes afected the world during the 1990s. Summarise hte information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart beolw three regions ro les procuctive. The table shows how these causes afected the world during the 1990s. Summarise hte information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph illustrates the primary causes why farming
land
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becomes less fertile. The chart displays how these reasons impacted the three nations of the world in 90’s
Overall
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, over-grazing of fields was one of the major reasons for
land
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deterioration.
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, deforestation in Europe and over-grazing in Oceania contributed to major causes of
land
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degradation. Over-grazing, deforestation and
over–cultivation
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over-cultivation
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make up the vast majority of reasons for
land
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degradation. Animal eating too much grass is the top logic, with just over a
third,
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cutting down trees is the
second,
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with just under a
third,
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and producing too many crops is the second to
last
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reason, with just over a quarter. Europe had just below twice as much degraded
land
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as Oceania, with 23 % and 13 % respectively In Oceania, over-grazing was the number one reason, with 11.3 %,
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deforestation was the main cause, with 9.8%, in Europe.
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, in North America, over-cultivation was the primary cause with 11.3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "third, ".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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