The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the rate of
teachers
of different genders in six types of educational settings in the United Kingdom in 2010. Overall
, it is noteworthy that in Nursery and primary schools, the percentage of female teachers
highly outweighs that of males
. Furthermore
, the rate in terms of gender in college lecturer
was almost the same.
Fix the agreement mistake
lecturers
To begin
with, in pre-schools, the majority of a teacher were women and only about 5% were men. Likewise
, in primary schools, female teachers
were dominant, reaching approximately 85%. Hence
, in some education institutes, females
are more preferred to a
Correct the article-noun agreement
teachers
a teacher
teachers
than males
. In contrast
, in universities, the rate of male lecturers was double that of females
, with about 70%.
When it comes to secondary schools, the proportion of males
comprised about 43% while
females
constituted almost 47%. Moreover
, in college, the proportion of males
and females
was almost the same. Lastly
, in private training institutes, males
tend to excel than females
in the number of teachers
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