The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the rate of
teachers
of different genders in six types of educational settings in the United Kingdom in 2010. Use synonyms
Overall
, it is noteworthy that in Nursery and primary schools, the percentage of female Linking Words
teachers
highly outweighs that of Use synonyms
males
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the rate in terms of gender in college Linking Words
lecturer
was almost the same.
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To begin
with, in pre-schools, the majority of a teacher were women and only about 5% were men. Linking Words
Likewise
, in primary schools, female Linking Words
teachers
were dominant, reaching approximately 85%. Use synonyms
Hence
, in some education institutes, Linking Words
females
are more preferred to Use synonyms
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teachers
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teachers
than Use synonyms
males
. Use synonyms
In contrast
, in universities, the rate of male lecturers was double that of Linking Words
females
, with about 70%.
When it comes to secondary schools, the proportion of Use synonyms
males
comprised about 43% Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
females
constituted almost 47%. Use synonyms
Moreover
, in college, the proportion of Linking Words
males
and Use synonyms
females
was almost the same. Use synonyms
Lastly
, in private training institutes, Linking Words
males
tend to excel than Use synonyms
females
in the number of Use synonyms
teachers
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, males, females with synonyms.
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