You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given charts illustrate the
percentages
employees
in the age group Change preposition
of employees
fromm
60-64, Correct your spelling
from
seperated
by Correct your spelling
separated
genders
, in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
Fix the agreement mistake
gender
Overall
, male workers
in the age group of 60 and over had a much higher
Correct the article-noun agreement
a much higher percentage
much higher percentages
percentages
than female
, with the most significant, being Fix the agreement mistake
females
Japan
in 1970, having the highest percents
of Replace the word
percentage
workers
. Meanwhile
women had a much lesser percentage of Add a comma
Meanwhile,
workers
, with Belgium having the lowest.
In 1970, saw the highest percentages
of male employees across all four countries, with Japan
percentage dominating the others at 84%, Change noun form
Japan's
while
Australia, USA
and Correct article usage
the USA
Beigium
at 74, 73 and 79, respectively. Correct your spelling
Belgium
However
in 2000, they Add a comma
However,
experiences
a great Wrong verb form
experienced
declined
in employees across the chart, with Belgium only having 19% in 2000. Replace the word
decline
While
the other three countries only saw declinement from 76% for Japan
and 47% for Australia.
On the other hand
, female workers
in both years saw relatively minor changes in number. Japan
also
having
the highest counts for both years, with America seconding, only dropping slightly in 2000. Australia had Wrong verb form
had
a
Correct article usage
apply
relatively
Change the adverb
relative
percentages
in both 1970 and 2000 but it never saw percentages
as low as Belgium only having 8% and 7% in bot
years respectively.Correct your spelling
both
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, workers, japan with synonyms.
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