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The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom last year. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom last year. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The top items, i.e. goods and services, sold online in
Australia
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,
Canada
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, and the United Kingdom
last
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 year are illustrated by the bar chart below. The three most items purchased in all countries are books, computer equipment, and music, dominantly bought by The United Kingdom shown by the blue chart. It was followed by
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 presented by the red and yellow chart, respectively. The United Kingdom was the nation with the most purchases in all commodities
last
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 year, except for financial services and toys.
Canada
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,
on the other hand
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, was least interested in buying food and drink.
Whereas
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Australia
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 nearly bought zero toys. Books had the highest
overall
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sales
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 with over 60% bought in the UK and over 40% bought in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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. Computer components were sold for over 50% in the UK and slightly over the
sales
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 of
literatures
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literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
works of literature
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 in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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. Music has the highest
sales
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 in the UK, overtaking the
sales
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 of books.
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,
sales
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 in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 were not as high, only slightly below 40% of consumers bought it online
last
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, canada, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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