The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A quick glance at the charts
show
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shows
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information about how
many
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much
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energy
was used in
Australian
household
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households
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and
second
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the second
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chart shows data about the percentage of
green house
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greenhouse
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gas
emissions
which result from household
energy
use
.
Overall
, the most useful household
energy
is heating and water heating. it was shown that
Australian
's each family mostly
use
heating systems because. Controversy, heating does not have many
gas
emissions
thus
it rates as the third smallest factor of the diagram.
However
, cooling is the least
energy
of both two charts. The most significant feature of the
energy
used in
Australian
households was heating followed by water heating which accounted for 42% and 30% respectively.
however
, the
gas
emissions
resulting from
this
energy
use
were 15% and 32% respectively. Refrigeration and other appliances represent 22% of the total
energy
use
in Australia
in
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apply
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7% and 15% separately. Despite that fact, the
Australian
greenhouse
gas
emissions
were almost the
double
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same
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amount which were 14% for refrigeration and 28% for other appliances.
On the other hand
, the lowest percentages of
energy
consumption included cooling at 2% and lighting at 4% with
gas
emissions
that collectively made up 11% .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, australian, gas, emissions, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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