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Ever year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, we are living in a world with the advents of several remarkable moderns. And communication between countries is urgent.
However
, a group of people who believe that linguistic diversity is not vital, bring a struggle to talk to each other. In my personal viewpoint, I strongly disagree with
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 statement and elaborates on my reasons. On the one hand, if the globe has more languages, it comes into
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. In the extreme instance of we wish to travel to another region or study abroad, we will deal with the issue of invisible, most jargon. We may get lost, and information about anything with the main reason being incompatibility between languages.
Whereas
, how to make countries around the planet Earth operate a common tongue is one of the wishes of a number of citizens.
Consequently
, they have bad experiences, and no impression on countries.
On the other hand
, the world is creating an unlimited of ancestors, which is a mission with the meaning of pride and gratitude of nation. Because, vocabulary is fundamentally oriented for education, which ways to distinguish between various cultures. In Vietnam, linguistics stems from Latin symbols in the 10th century compared to the hieroglyphics of Laos, Thais, and China,... Another essential point to consider is that the crowd has learned more foreign dialects with the aim of fine-tuning knowledge and making opportunities for themselves
such
 as growth in career. Leading to an increased capacity approach with the culture, public, and society of other nations. With the reasons mentioned above, I realized that word is so important for the country. In my opinion, we need to conserve sound, which is a native place, and birthplace.
Hence
, the community has introduced and spread the mother language.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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