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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The information about the proportion of individuals of various ages in the UK who used
internet
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 services on
daily
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a daily
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 basis from 2003-2006 is represented by the given bar graph. The information is calibrated in the form of percentages.
Overall
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, the most striking feature of the chart is that young adults
upto
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up to
 24
years
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 old are the maximum
internet
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 users in the given
years
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,
while
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 the elderly above 65
years
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 old
seems
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seem
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 least interested in
the
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apply
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modern
internet
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 technology.
To begin
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, youngsters
upto
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up to
 24
years
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 old shared similar proportions(80%) in
internet
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 usage in the
years
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 2003 and 2004, whilst in the next year, the
internet
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 popularity among
this
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 age group
raised
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rose
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 by 20%. For 25-
44
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44-year-olds
years
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 old,
internet
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 users
ranges
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range
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 from a low of 50% in 2003 to a high of 80% in 2006, with 60% and 70% users in between. Adults from 45-54
years
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 old represented a slightly higher percentage of
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internet
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Internet
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 in all four
years
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 than the former age group: 60% in 2003, 70% in 2004, 75% in 2005 and 80% in 2006. With respect to 55-64
years
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old
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apply
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,
internet
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 services used for the first two
years
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 have a negligible difference of approximately 3%
whereas
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 in the
last
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 two
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years
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years,
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 a considerable difference of 18% can be noticed.
However
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,
least
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the least
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internet
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 customers(less than 20%) were noted in the above 65
years
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 old age group in the
last
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 three
years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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