The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money spent on buying game
softwares
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software
,
CDs
and DVDs, as well, in a period of 4 years globally (from 2000 to 2004). looking at the chart,
it is clear that
both games and videos experienced an upward trend during the whole period,
whereas
CDs
saw a steady state of
being sold
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sales
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during these years. At the
begining
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beginning
of the period,
CDs
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CD
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sales stood at about 35 billion dollars, which was by far the most sold item, which
remaied
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remained
almost the same in the next three following years. The revenue from games was only about 15
billions
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billion
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per year in 2000, experiencing an upward trend and
peaked
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at roughly 18
billions
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billion
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in 2003.
It is clear that
the money earned from selling DVDs has a much more significant upward trend as opposed to the other two categories, from almost 18 to 32
billions
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billion
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in 2000 and 2003 respectively.
However
,
CDs
account for the most of money which was earned with a slight variation worldwide.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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