The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The given map provides extensive data regarding the alteration of Petland, a coastal town, in two different time periods from 1950 to 2007.

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, the

road

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was extended along a

yacht

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marina

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and between houses and other multiple facilities were added. A closer scrutiny of pictures reveals that a sea which was in the south was replaced with a

yacht

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marina

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and new apartments were constructed in the east-south of the

yacht

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marina

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Next,

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many shops were set up on each side of the

road

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Additionally

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, an industrial area was displaced with a swimming pool and a multi-storey car park which was

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one storey and in the east of the wider

road

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built. There was

also

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a park developed in the west of the

yacht

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marina

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. Turning to the south side, the cinema was erected in a territory which was an empty space beforehand.

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, houses were assembled

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each side of

newly

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the newly

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extended

road

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instead

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of grassland.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, yacht, marina with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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