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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below pie charts illustrate the alterations in spending by a certain UK school per year in three different years, 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Overall
, teachers’ payments
was
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were
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 the biggest
portion
in
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of
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 annual spending and
it
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they
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 increased each year. It is interesting to note that other workers’
salaries
 had a downward trend. In 1981, Teachers’ earning was the biggest
portion
among
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of
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 all spending
by
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at
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 40
percent
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per cent
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. Other workers’
salaries
was
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were
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 second
portion
byb
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by
 just below a third and resources and
furnitur
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furniture
 and equipment had
same
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the same
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portion
 by 15
percent
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per cent
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.
Proportion
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 of insurance was negligible. By
turn
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1991, teachers’
earning
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earnings
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 and resources spending rose
and
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apply
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50 and
a
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apply
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fifth
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fifty
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percent
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per cent
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 of total spending was allocated
these
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to these
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cost
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costs
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.
On the other hand
,
cost
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the cost
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 of furniture and other workers
reduced
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was reduced
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 by 20 and 5
percent
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per cent
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.
Cost
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The cost
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 of insurance had no significant change. In 2001, teachers’
salaries
, resources, and other workers’
salaries
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were resuced
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resuced
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reduced
rescued
 and reached
to
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just below a half and a fifth and exactly 9
percent
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per cent
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,
repectively
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respectively
.Furniture
cost
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costs
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 increased considerably and reached
to
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apply
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over a fifth. 8
percent
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per cent
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 of total spending was allocated to insurance.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers’, portion, salaries, percent, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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