In this technological era, personal information is stored on computers by many companies and organisations

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day, with the advancement of technology, personal

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is stored on computers or clouds. Some argue that

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information can be leaked illegally by companies and

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some think that it can make life easier and the world safe. From my point of view, I think

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more benefits than its disadvantages.

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has been a great invention since it first appeared in the late 20th century. It is widely popular that people store their information on the clouds.

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, one drawback could be that

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is hacked which leads to the loss of money kept in online banking accounts.

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, my credit card was hacked

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months ago and I lost 10 million VND.

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the end, fortunately, I could take my money back after

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to the bank.

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, one reason why keeping personal

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or computers is advantageous is that it is easier for people, especially for those who are forgetful, to sign in to many different sites without remembering accounts and

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. It is very secure as it needs people’s

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or

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to authenticate.

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, it creates a

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experience and

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time.

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, another benefit could be using online payment methods

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as e-wallets and Apple Pay to purchase goods without physical cards. It could reduce crime rates in big cities.

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, information

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in authority computers can help close criminal cases.

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, an image of a thief extracted from a CCTV can help the police know who the crime is. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the advantages of storing personal

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more than its disadvantages. It can make

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world a better place.