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The line hraph shows the Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017)

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The given line graph illustrates information about the
number
 of
people
 coming to a specific Caribbean
island
 over a seven-year period from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that the
number
 of
visitors
 both staying on
cruise
 ships and staying on
island
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the island
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 increased over the period given in question. Looking into detail,
people
 staying on a
cruise
ship
 accounted for a quarter of a
million
 in 2010
while
 the
number
 of
people
preferred
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who preferred
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 to stay on
island
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the island
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 was approximately
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of a
million
. Until 2011,
people
 staying on the
island
 remained stable.
However
, more
visitors
 opted
for staying
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to stay
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 on a
cruise
ship
, at nearly half a
million
. The figures for
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 experienced an increase, eventually representing 1.5
million
 in 2013. From 2015 to 2016 the
number
 of
people
 staying on the
island
 and on a
cruise
ship
 was equal, accounting for just above 1.5
million
. After 2016 the
number
 of tourists staying on a
ship
 experienced a much steeper increase compared to
visitors
stayin
Correct your spelling
staying
 on the
island
.
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Structure
Consider including a brief conclusion to summarise your findings and observations succinctly, enhancing the overall clarity and completeness of your essay.
Language use
Try to use a varied range of sentence structures and vocabulary to demonstrate linguistic flexibility and precision.
Content
You accurately interpreted the data from the graph and provided a clear, overall trend in the introduction.
Structure
Your essay has a logical flow of information, moving smoothly from a general overview to specific details.
Language use
You effectively used comparative structures to highlight changes over time, which is key in describing trends.

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