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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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 of domestic catches and fresh fish brought from abroad into Perth, Australia from 2004 to 2014.
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, 2009 had the highest sum of metric
tons
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 followed by 2008
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 the lowest were in 2004 and 2005.
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, 2008 had the most catches as compared to
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 of the years whilst 2012 had the least catches. For the years 2004 to 2014, all imports were lower than local catches. In 2004, domestic fresh fish of 2677.7 caught were higher than 464.5 metric
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 of imports;
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, in
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 year the
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 total was noticed. 309.9 metric
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 were shipped from abroad in 2006
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 2031.9 metric
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 were produced locally.
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, 2013 had a total of 2031.9 and
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, 2004 had 3142.2. Local catches in 2008 were well over catches in 2005 and produce in 2007 was almost 10000 just over caches in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
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