Instructions Read the question below and write an essay dealing with Advantages and Disadvantages. Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan. Only then attempt to write this essay. Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion.

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During and after
COVID
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the COVID
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pandemic, a large
amount
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number
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of
companies
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made
workers
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to
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apply
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work
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at
home
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. Some people think that
this
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discouraged employers and
therfore
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therefore
had negative impacts on
companies
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while
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others highlighted the advantages of doing jobs from
home
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. In my opinion,
benefits
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the benefits
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this
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new trend of working
had
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has
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brought to
companies
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are greater than loss.
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essay will evaluate both sides of virtual working. Some argue that working individually at
home
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discourage
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discourages
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employer's will to
work
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because of
environment
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the environment
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they are working.
Companies
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are designed to allow co-
workers
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to
work
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collaboratively with an adequate amount of anxiety and competition to efficiently achieve
a
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the
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goal
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goals
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of the
companies
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.
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, when
workers
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are not in
this
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specific environment, it is unsure whether they can perform well or not in other places. For me, it was hard to focus on studying at
home
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compared to a library or a school, where many people compete and study at the same
time
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because there were no means
that
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to
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motivates
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motivate
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me to study.
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, it can
also
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be said that working from house
let
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lets
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workers
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to
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apply
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allocate
time
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more efficiently. As
time
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goes by, the purpose of using
company's
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a company's
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building is disappearing.
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, colleagues
in
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at
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work
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wherever they want to in the building and their working hours
is
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are
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not fixed, but flexible. These can be carried out at
home
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as well.
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,
workers
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do not necessarily have to go to
a
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the
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main building of
companies
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. Rather, they can use commuting
time
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on doing
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to do
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jobs that are helpful for
companies
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.
To sum up
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, the new way of working - virtual working, both have good and bad aspects.
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, I think that
positive
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the positive
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impacts that
companies
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can expect
is
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are
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much greater than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your essay maintains a clear and consistent point of view throughout. This will help in reinforcing your arguments and making your position more compelling.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and transitions to improve flow and coherence. This can help to make your essay more engaging and easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Whenever possible, support your arguments with specific examples. This helps in making your points more convincing and adds depth to your essay.
General
Careful proofreading to catch and correct minor grammatical errors can significantly improve the overall quality of your essay.
Introduction
The essay effectively introduces the subject and presents a clear thesis statement, setting a strong foundation for the discussion.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have developed a balanced discussion by examining both the advantages and disadvantages of working from home, which is a good approach to this type of task.
Conclusion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes the key points and restates your opinion, providing a clear closure to your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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