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The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates

The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates
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The 3 graphs provided give information about the rules on which houses need to be designed for 2 distinct
climates
( warm and cool).
Overall
, The
roof
 shape is triangular in warm
climates
whereas
 it is high-angled in
the
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other ones,
this
 shapes let the sunlight directly go through the house in the latter and
block
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 it in the former.
In addition
, materials used in construction are highly
varried
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varied
 between the buildings in cool and warm
climates
. Looking at the details,
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the Buidling
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Buidling
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Building
 material used in the
roof
 has heat storing ability in cool climate conditions meanwhile
for
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the
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apply
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warmer
weathers
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weather
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, they possess reflective features. Regarding interiors, A thermal building material is applied in colder air conditions.
furthermore
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 windows are closed in
day times
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the daytime
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 and open at
nights
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night
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 in warm
climates
, allowing natural air flow inside. An insulation material covers
he
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 exterior wall in the cool climate
as well as
 its
roof
. As for the other condition,
this
matterial
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material
only
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is only
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 used for the
roof
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