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The line graph shows thefts per thousands vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows thefts per thousands vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the number of vehicles stolen in four different European nations between the
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 of 1990 and 1999. Interesting to note that Great Britain's score started out the highest at somewhere just below 20, yet it experienced the sharpest of drops to around slightly above 15
while
 France which was at the bottom in the beginning at a position slightly above 5,
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had a steady a rise to the score of below 15. If we take a closer look at the graph, we can see that Great Britain's score had dropped significantly in 1992, but still stayed above 15 and it continued to rise slowly before falling down again to slightly above 15. France
however
, had seen only a rise in
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 numbers, from 5 to 10 in 1995 before the line became monotone for 3 years before rising again. Sweden began at the third highest rank
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, it had a slow dip from the beginning, the
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 seemed to change in 1995
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 it rose slightly, but it decreased again until reaching almost the same point as Canada, somewhere above 5. Speaking of Canada,
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 line was almost monotone, except
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 beginning where it had a gradual decrease from 1990 to 1993, after which it
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slowly
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 number close to
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Sweden.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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