Many young people today spend a lot of time playing electronic games. In this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays a fiction of young generation
are
playing different types of electronic Correct subject-verb agreement
is
games
also
they are spending many
time Correct word choice
apply
to
Change preposition
on
it
.Now I Correct pronoun usage
them
belive
that it has positive and negative sides and I explain both sides.
On the one hand, most of Correct your spelling
believe
Add an article
the pupi
pupi ls
are Correct your spelling
pupils
interesting
play Replace the word
interested
the
computerized Correct article usage
apply
games
.Now that they are very convenience
,pupils are playing it.If they play computerized Replace the word
convenient
games
with their friends ,they will be happy .Also
they are not boring . Add a comma
Also,
Besides
that digital games
have comforts to young people . For example
, young
generation will Add an article
the young
be
earn money from it .Unnecessary verb
apply
Thus
I played different kinds of electronic games
with my siblings in my childhood .Now that l have many lessons , I do not play computerized games
.
On the other hand
, Now a
fiction of digital Correct article usage
the
games
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
impetously
taken over the world . Correct your spelling
impetuously
Then
pupils are playing
Wrong verb form
play
this
Correct determiner usage
these
games
at
Change preposition
in
the
Remove the article
apply
tbeir
free time. From my Correct your spelling
their
prospective
,Correct your spelling
perspective
this
pastime are
very harmful to Change the verb form
is
people
health . They play Change noun form
people's
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
games
from
their phone and Change preposition
on
this
phone light is impacting to
their eye and they Wrong verb form
impacts
will be
ill. If they have free time , they must Verb problem
become
doing
their tasks or Change the verb form
do
be doing
homeworks
.Correct your spelling
homework
This
is main
argument that they learn useful Change the article
the main
informathions
from their phone or computer .Correct your spelling
information
For example
, Anerican
young people are not playing computerized Correct your spelling
American
games
and they
they are learning Correct pronoun usage
apply
many
online education . Replace the quantifier
much
Evidently
they are very clever and Add a comma
Evidently,
abilitily
.
In conclusion , Correct your spelling
ability
young
generation Correct article usage
the young
have
their choices about digital Change the verb form
has
games
or education. If they choose education ,their parents are exulting from their children
choicesChange noun form
children's
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